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This long ass chapter is my reward for putting up with my rewrite of my story. All >15,000 words of it which is about half as long as the original version. Although it is only replaces about three chapters of it in one. Yeah that much for only the first prologue arch. And this is the prologue arch which is only one chapter. 😊

Now onto the story elements I wrote, I ended up, no I wanted to rewrite Jack and a few more characters designs. So I made them into the first idea that came to mind. Why I feel some of you will like it and others will not. I want you to keep an open mind and enjoy it. Although I ended up writing some content I never thought I would and actually enjoyed it. While it was weird and different I did enjoy it. And no it was not a fucking "lemon" and I will not be adding any either!

Continuing that topic in a way. I always wanted to write a mature, dark, violent, even a bit perverted Pokemon fan-fiction. So now that I have decided and am rewriting my Fusion's & Anthro's Pokemon story. I am doing just that! I'll be honest the first version was a perverted if you had eyes and picked up on the points. So just a heads up the pervert side is only for the humor and I want the story to be like Bault Blade in that regard as nothing feels misplaced nor forced.

I hope you all read this with an open mind and enjoy it and I will not tolerate flamers and haters.

Well I hope you enjoyed my first chapter! So now let’s talk a bit about what you read

First off, the new designs of Jack, Violet and Eric and co. Each one I recreated in a new form that felt was natural and less restricted in details like the past version. So I made them what I wanted and decided not to censor or cut back in what I saw them as. Continuing on I wanted a wide range of ethnicity, races, shapes of all sizes, hugely busty to the normal. I want this story have each OC be unique and different and not have they feel like they are just cookie cutter designs.

So Jack may have the huge breast size but it’s only for having a wide character selection and humor like the jokes I made about them being unrealistic. Which in all honesty, I found very funny. :D This was what I found fun to write, especially the Tf scene of Jack going through the TG, TF and a bit of BE. Now the BE, as far as I am concerned is not in the story. Granted those that know what it is might argue it is there. I say, they are right but I only want to see that in a transformation sequence or that its used for parody/humor. In this case it led to some jokes.

Like the ones that you read in the story which of people want me to I can make it a running gag.

Something else to note, all characters have a reason for their design. While some might not make sense right now. They will eventually, such as Jacks second form. There are plot reasons to why that happened.

Now for some reason while Jack stayed the same for the most part, Violet got a huge overhaul! And a lot more hints into her character and mental thoughts. After all there is a lot about her that you can learn off of just this one chapter. 😉

Oh yeah, Jack is not a godmod, broken or OP as he is just as strong as when he first Met Violet in the first version.

So I hope you all enjoyed it and don't leave flames. Tell me what you love and what could be changed in future releases.

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1: Outsole: the outer sole that touches the ground of a boot or shoe.
2: Midsole: A line of rubber like the outsole of a shoe that connects the outsole to the made fabric of the shoe
3. Beveled: the inclination that one line or surface makes with another when not at right angles. (taken from dictionary.com)
4. Quadruped: an animal that has four feet. Like a dog in a sense.
5. Island: In this case it is not a piece of land surround by water. But instead a term used for a piece of counter space that is not attached to the wall and is  like a table in a sense as it is surrounded by open access at all sides.
6. Bench: A bench in this case is not what you set on in the park. Here is like a booth at a restaurant. The set is blended right into the design of the buildings very structure most of the time. Here I believe the term bench can be used or a booth seat if you want.
7. Fillet: It takes the same effect as a Chamfer in a way. What it does is adds material to the corner to create a diagonal corner/surface}
8. Iris: I already used this by now a few times. It’s both a flower and the colored section of the human eye or an animal’s eye that controls how larger or how small the pupil gets. In this cases it’s the part of the human eye.
9. Tongue: Not to be confused with the part of the mouth but instead in this case it is apart of a shoe. It’s the part that runs up over the top of the foot and under the shoe lances.
10. Collar:
11. Senbon: Needles, these are also known as needles with can have a wide variety of uses. In this case it is a ninja weapon that is normally non-lethal as it is a medical tool. Although if used right they can kill.
12. Hakama: Hakama are a type of traditional Japanese clothing. They were originally worn only by men, but today they are worn by both sexes. Hakama are tied at the waist and fall approximately to the ankles. Hakama are worn over a kimono (hakamashita). {Taken from Wikipedia.}
13. isosceles triangles: A triangle where two sides of the flat shape is equal and the third one is not.

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I was reading story Jack Vs Jaden, I was trying find Author was Jaden